It has potential...
I don't know about everybody else, but I LIKE the art style. I think it's pretty creative, with the roughness and all.
So as I said, liked the graphics, your story and style sort of sucked, your sound was okay, but needs serious improvement. It's only violence was the ear and shotgun. There wasn't really any humor.
Overall I'd give this a three. It's not too good, but it was potential. Also, make the subtitles more than one frame. And what's up with the "fuck Newgrounds!" (or whatever it said.) Honestly.
Keep trying, though. I could see really good movies coming from you in the future.